Writing Abandoned Places

The Abandoned City We were out training. My group specialises in killing aliens. We have a coach who trains us. We thought it was all going well but then... “Run/kua pau,” said the head coach because the aliens are chasing us and firing bullets. I turned around and saw my head coach lying on the ground dead! Finally after running for ages there was somewhere I could peep around so they couldn't find me. As I rushed around the corner and the aliens just ran past me. Once they were gone I turned around and went the other way to where the aliens were going. Finally there was an exit coming up so I ran out of it. Next there was a statue that looked a little off, suddenly it started to chase me along the corridor. It looked like the corridor would go on forever. I ran for about an hour and I was getting a little tired. I ran out an exit and ran through the bushes and lost him. I saw a palace that looked about a thousand years old. I went in and it had moss all over the walls and vines hanging down from the roof. I concentrated too much at looking at the walls and I tripped over one of the vines that were on the ground and I was bleeding a lot and one of my teeth fell out of my mouth. I heard running coming from a distance. I started running and they just missed me because they were blood aliens. How am going to get out of this I said to myself....

We will be successful if we….

- Use language features to make our writing better and more interesting.

-Use our senses to help the reader imagine this place.

-Have some Te Reo Māori words.

-use descriptive language that has impact for our reader.